Position Title: Intern
Responsibilities:
-Perform hands on building M&E preventive maintenance and attend to fault complaints like building, basic electrical and air-con works
-Conduct routine checks and update for any defects/ damages for reporting
-Attend to client’s requests and complains
-Daily routine follow up on maintenance job and daily check on equipments
-Familiarise with the location of all equipments and status
-Other duties as and when assigned
-Assist in Supervision of other subcontractors
Requirements:
-Candidate must be currently pursuing at least a Bachelor's Degree in Engineering (Mechanical), Engineering (Electrical/Electronic), Engineering (Others) or equivalent.
-10 Internship duration of 3 month(s).
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(my address)
2 September 2009
Lydia Quek
Human Resource Manager
Elyo South East Asia Pte Ltd
146B Paya Lebar Road
# 03-01 ACE Building
Singapore 409017
Dear Ms. Quek,
Re:Internship for Electrical/Electronic Engineering Students
I am very interested in the above-mentioned internship, as advertised on JobStreet.com. I believe I have the necessary skills and qualities to make an impact during the 3-month period.
Currently, I am a third year undergraduate pursuing a Bachelor’s Degree in Electrical Engineering at National University of Singapore. Having maintained excellent academic performance, I believe I possess the analytical ability to handle the tasks assigned to me. In addition, balancing part-time tuition with study has honed my time-management and organizational skills. As I am specializing in Electrical Energy System, I am being equipped with the necessary knowledge to excel in the utility industry.
I have always enjoyed hands-on tasks that require good observation skills, like carrying out simulation tests on printers. During my temporary job as a pharmacy assistant, I was commended by my supervisor to be initiative and inquisitive. This was probably due to my strong sense of curiosity and motivation to seek out an answer. When doing community service work in Cambodia, my team achieved our goals after overcoming obstacles like rural lifestyle and language barrier. This demonstrated my ability to adapt to a new environment and perform in a team.
My resume is enclosed for your kind perusal. Should you require more information, I will be most obliged to finish it. I will be very glad to attend an interview convenient to you. You may contact me at (mobile) or (email).
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Yours sincerely,
(Signature)
Chee Xiang Min
Enclosure: Resume
UCS1001 MME Tri2 2023-24 Dynamic Thinkers
1 week ago
This letter is a rather good application letter. Without much difficulty, I am able to relate your interest and skills to the job’s requirements. You showed explicit interest in the opening statement and ended the letter humbly with your great enthusiasm in getting an interview from them. The points are not cluttered all over and I can see you linking up points on your resume into the application letter to highlight your strengths.
ReplyDeleteHowever, there are a few minor glitches that I observed while reading your letter. Perhaps you might want to consider adding a ‘Ms.’ In front of the receiver’s name before her designation. Next, in the third paragraph, you mentioned “This was probably due to my strong sense of curiosity and motivation to seek out an answer.” The usage of ‘probably’ gives me a slight sense of your insecurity, therefore you might want to consider rephrasing it and portray more confidence. Lastly, I think there should be your full name below your signature. Overall, this application letter is considerably worthy.
Regards,
Ivan
Hahaha! You seem reluctant to put your address :P Anyway, this is a fine letter which was very easy to read because it was short, simple and sweet! Although you do not have much to say (probably because you were not very active in NUS), you have put your strengths across with whatever little activities you have.
ReplyDeleteI basically have not many suggestions to give you. I was thinking that you might want to consider adding a 'Ms. before the receiver's name. (As mentioned by Ivan).
However, I beg to differ from Ivan with regards to using "probably". I feel that it is an ok word to use as it shows humility on your side! You do not exactly know why your employer praised you to be initiative and inquisitive. =) It is up to you to decide. Bye!
Hi Xiang Min, I think that your letter is comprehensive and has all the 7Cs, especially the clear and concise points. The format is sound but I feel that you could actually leave a space between the 'Chee Xiang Min' and enclosure portion just for a more spaced-out, less cramped feel. I think you get the idea.
ReplyDeleteMoreover, there is detailed elaboration of your experiences and what skills you gained from them.
However, I think that you could use more sentence linkages to improve sentence and idea flow. For example, your point on your specialisation equipping you with utility knowledge could be placed immediately after the sentence about pursuing a degree in EE. After that, you could use a linker like 'Not only that' before 'Having maintained excellent academic..' to continue on the same idea.
The use of sentence linkages could also be used for the Cambodia community work part as it is a sudden change of topic from the temporary pharmacy assistant experience.
On the other hand, your closing paragraph shows great respect and courtesy to the reader, something that I found difficult to achieve for my own letter. Kudos to that.
Also, I agree with Sarah on the use of 'probably' for the same reasons :)
Hope draft 2 turns out well.
- Abigail -
Hi Xiang Min,
ReplyDeleteI like your introductory paragraph. It shows that you are confident.
In the last sentence of paragraph 2, I think “being” can be excluded? Not very sure about that though.
In paragraph 3, there seem to be a missing link between your work in Cambodia and your temporary job. Perhaps you can split them into 2 paragraphs and elaborate slightly more on each of them. It will also be good if you can try to show how will that help you perform during the internship as well.
I like your ending too. Nicely done. By the way, should it be “finish” or “furnish” ? I am not very sure though.
“Probably” is fine. Perhaps you can give 1 or 2 other examples to illustrate your “strong sense of curiosity and motivation…” and try to show how will that help you with this internship.
Cheers,
Chee Siang
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